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He sat there, watching the scene play out below
He would always try to imagine what the men below said to one another
Sitting there, observing them

It wasn't long before a different man came into view
The man had different markings on his uniform
He didn't know or care what they meant

Looking down the sights at the new man
The front globe was lined up
Then the rear leaf

The new man fell.

In an instant there was utter silence
Chaos and shouting from below
He moved back from the window

The detectors would never find the shot
Too many echos, too many places to hide
He rested

He was a simple man, really
Took professional pride in his work
Always took pride in his work

He didn't know if the war was still being fought
He didn't care
All he knew was that this was what he did now

It wasn't happy work
Wasn't sad or grudging
It was simple

He relocated
These old aparement complexes were perfect
He now knew why the gangsters liked them


A new vantage point
Another man
He lined up the man's head in the sights

Impossible to miss at this distance
The man's blue beret fell to the ground
With the body

Where a man once stood
Only a body remained
It was dirty work sometimes

He poured himself another cup of coffee
©2008-2009 ~PaulStrealer
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Author's Comments

First of a line of narrative poems I'm working on.

Utterly unrelated to my other story.

This one is set in a post-collapse USA, roughly 2012. After an economic collapse, the UN "peacekeeping" forces moved in. They did not bring peace.

Sort of a guerrilla war type thing.

This man happens to hunt other men, those in blue helmets and blue berets. He doesn't enjoy what he does, nor does he hate it. It's just something that "needs doing". He takes professional pride in his work, even though he gets no reward for it aside from the satisfaction of a job well done and maybe something more too...you be the judge.

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:iconkombat-unit:
A verlibr?

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A what?

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I'm just another bitter white person clinging to my god and my gun.
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a type of a poem that doesn't have actual rhymes.

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Then yep, it is. It wasn't originally even going to be a poem, until I noticed that it was looking an awful lot like one(then I made it one).

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This isn't the sort of thing I like normally but I will admit you have a knack for it. There is one typo I noticed, the word APARTMENT should have a 't' instead of an 'e' and a little punctuation might help it read better. Other than those picky ass little things :D well done!

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I didn't notice that typo, thanks. It originally had punctuation on the ends, but it looked too cluttered.

I'm not really much of a poet.

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I'm just another bitter white person clinging to my god and my gun.
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But you are a very good storyteller. And that's what really counts.

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A true friend sees the pain in your eyes while everyone else believes the smile on your face.
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Thanks!

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Good job. I like the whole "lone sniper" theme, and it somehow reminds me of the "Hunter" by Ian McDonald/Will Pierce.
The part about it being just work.

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